Tuesday, April 1, 2014

Deflection

You asked why
I pointed out constellations
like they were my grandchildren,
you, the stranger sitting next to me
at their dance recital.


I filled our silences with their stories.
Distracted you from realizing:
you were the stranger sitting next to me.


It's a new challenge from the folks at yeah write!
Each week we have 42 words to answer a question--in April, my responses will come in poem form.
This week's question: What's so amazing that keeps us stargazing?

28 comments:

  1. ooh this goes way deep. Very nicely written!

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  2. Oh, I love this. So much said in 42 words.

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  3. Love your unique take on the question!

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  4. Love this line: "I filled our silences with their stories." Some relationships are like that, huh?

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    1. Yes, unfortunately. But we learn from them, right?

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  5. Wonderful! What a fantastic image. I can't even pick out my favorite part - it's just so well done. Thanks for trying out the gargleblaster!

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  6. This is so beautiful! Amazing 42 is all I can say! :-)

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  7. That last line packs a punch...:)

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  8. This is fantastic! Like Christine, I can't choose my favourite line because the whole thing is so good. Great take on the prompt! :)

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  9. This is so sad, but I've been here in a relationship before (of course it eventually ended, as filled silence can only last so long...)

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    1. Yeah, eventually silences take over...but it's usually for the best.

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  10. I just love this. You packed so much into so few words.

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    1. Thank you! The word limit was a challenge!

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  11. This may be the best I've read from you!

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    1. Wow, there's some motivation for Poetry Month! Thanks!

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  12. Hey, Chicago...I'm not sure what to think. A lot to it, making me think of all kinds of things.

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    1. Good! Lots of thoughts are what I want.

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