Wednesday, January 15, 2014

No Spark

The first time I saw how strong a word is, I was too late to take it back.
"If that's how you feel, what else is there to say?” she said.
“Wait,” I said.

But she was gone.

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14 comments:

  1. GinaJanuary 16, 2014 at 11:10 AM

    This socked me in the gut! I've been on both sides of this.

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    1. As the Romans DoJanuary 16, 2014 at 8:30 PM

      Me too--I actually had the he/she switched in an earlier draft, but wanted to put more distance between myself and the narrator.

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  2. JannaTWritesJanuary 16, 2014 at 9:49 PM

    I've been here, too. Nicely done!

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  3. AnonymousJanuary 16, 2014 at 11:58 PM

    Once again, I am reminded of how very powerful words can be.

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  4. dontpanic2011January 17, 2014 at 8:05 PM

    This makes me wonder exactly what got said. Great job capturing such a classic moment in so few words and yet keeping all of the emotional punch.

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  5. Thomas Charles MacInnesJanuary 18, 2014 at 7:44 AM

    So very true! I think we have all been on both sides of this situation. Learning some self-restraint, verbally and in print, can spare others, and ourselves, a lot of heart ache down the road. Point well-taken, my friend. Good work! :)

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  6. DraugJanuary 19, 2014 at 8:52 AM

    It's strange the amount of power in a wrong word.

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  7. TrifectaJanuary 19, 2014 at 5:59 PM

    Oh, I love this. I think the short, choppy words help convey your message. Thanks for linking up.

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  8. Ann BennettJanuary 19, 2014 at 9:59 PM

    For all the times my mouth has gotten me in trouble - well said.

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